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Regarding chapter 6...
16 Dec 2023, 05:27 PM

So I was delighted to get some responses to my work recent and decided I should post more of MHO here! Trouble is,... which version? Let me explain.

MHO has a very small number of... well, lewd scenes. I REALLY can't emphasize enough how few they are thus far, as this is very much not meant as a smut fic. And most of them are in the first two episodes so far (though I do have a handful more planned for later on). Now again, that stuff isn't the focus of the story, but I did insert them to show where the protagonists' heads are at on certain things. Especially as time goes on, sexual tension builds up between these two (especially when they're not busy running or fighting for their lives, getting wrapped up in big adventures and such) and they occasionally need to, well, relieve those tensions.

That said, especially with these earlier episodes, I did end up making alternate versions of two or three chapters, omitting the more detailed scenes of... certain activities. There are still references to them as this is still a story geared towards a more mature audience overall. But I know not everyone is interested in reading the more explicit bits, and those are mostly just there as a bit of indulgence and fan service, in a way.

So that brings me to the question... should I upload both versions here, or only the trimmed versions? In case you're wondering, the first two are short solo scenes, with the first being in chapter six. (IIRC the next is in chapter 10.) Then there's one in the middle of episode 2, and then there's one in episode 4 and... that's it so far. So yeah, which path should I take on this site? I'll probably go ahead and upload the trimmed version for now, so i guess I'm asking whether or not I should upload the explicit version as well.

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