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NegaDYOS: All's Well that... well... It Ended
NegaDYOS: All's Well that... well... It Ended by @Thorvald (El Thorvaldo)

My 22nd submission to DYOS XII: [link]
See original post for musical cues.

Life's but a walking shadow, a poor player
That struts and frets his hour upon the stage
And then is heard no more: it is a tale
Told by an idiot, full of sound and fury,
Signifying nothing.
—Macbeth, Macbeth Act V.v

Narratively speaking, there is one comic even worse than this—so bad, in fact, that it was rewritten before I'd even seen the original draft. But taken together, the Grudge-Match was CivGeneral's low-water mark, and so badly-conceived it unwittingly made him look like a jackass. While some of the same problematic elements would crop up again during the 2011 Time Travel Arc (its own circle of Hell), I'm fairly confident in saying CG never produced another story so lazy, pointless, or self-embarrassing. Spoofing it has been an act of catharsis, and it's my hope that these parodies provide a fun (and funny) way of learning from its (many) mistakes.

On to the funnies:

Samus's monologue was inevitable, largely because we did not get her POV in the original comic outside of minor verbal spurs. It also underlines my single biggest grievance with the comic on a meta-level. Don't read it too long or you may succumb to Fridge Horror.

"I'll sue them for every penny they have!" was cribbed from a Spitting Image sketch that has since been purged from ¥ouTub€. :(

Samus is Lutheran.

Kudos to e350tb for inspiring the censorblur effect and the War of the Worlds nod.

Discord Hyperthink by EpycWyn;
Stickin' Around © Nelvana;
Original comics by CivGeneral, with afterword by taillesskangaru.

Originally submitted to DeviantArt October 2017 as a PNG; converted to lossy JPEG to fit the file size cap—because the dimensions are too extreme for WebP to handle. D: See original post for full fidelity.


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Posted: Saturday, 20 May, 2023 @ 07:18 PM

Well...so maybe sort of in some other dimension a 'happy' ending (?)

Posted: Saturday, 20 May, 2023 @ 07:48 PM

@SheevraSidhe0274: Whew, good thing it was just a dream..!

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